Thanks to the factory farming, farmers abandon their traditional way of cultivation, which is a limit to the productivity and efficiency.

这句话改成：Farmers are forced to abandon their traditional way of cultivation,because the factory is limited to the produtivity and efficieny.这句话表因果关系。

It is hardly to imagine that if there is no factory farming, most of people will be starved and live in poverty.

这句话表述不好，改成：We could imagine if there is no factory industrial,the marjority of poeple will be starved to death.

Moreover, the biotechnology, one of the most incredible new technologies, has been transforming the traditional idea about agriculture.

这句话表达方式错误，改成：Therefore, the biltechnology,on of the most incredible new technologies, which has been transformed the traditional ideas about agriculture.

这里是非限制性的定语从句，前面的短语是对这种技术的解释，后面的是定语从句。

Scientist could use this technology to create a new type of creature.

这里的词不能用create,改成：search for

To begin with, some new technology produced fruit, such as transgenic food, may have a detrimental influence upon health.

这句改成：Firstly, some new technology are put into fruit,such as: transgenic food, which may have a crucial influence upon health.

这里要改成被动语态，因为是技术被投入使用。

In addition, the modern agriculture poses a treat to the ecosystem and to the farmland.

你的用词不好，改成：In addition to this, the modern agriculture porpose a treatment to the ecoysystem and the farmland.

这里表并列，不要后面的to

In conclusion, modern inventions bring people the great significance of living and economic prosperity as well as negative repercussions.

In conclusion, modern inventions bring people with great significance of living and ecomomic prosperity, but it also bring negative repercussions as well.

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